FemaleMember since 7 Feb 12Last online 7 years ago

I write because if I express myself in any other way it generally turns out badly. So, I bow to you and allow you into the shadowy realms of my darkest thoughts.

  • iWriter
    8 years agoReply
    This story is good, though I think your style is a little immature (though this could of course be very good depending who your target audience/speakers age was). Also, phrases such as 'Karen, which was her name' could be neatened up little ;) I really enjoyed it though, wish it was longer.

    Ps, check out my poem for the competition, Plasticine Elephant, if you grab a chance. Ta.
    The Girl In The Picture
    The Girl In The...
    This was a story I wrote for a competition created by Sophia Bennett called The Girl in the Picture. Unfortunately I didn't win, but hey, there's always next time. I am in the process of editing this,...
    Thank you, and I did write it quite a while ago which may explain why it sounds a little immature. And I agree, it probably could have been neatened up a little. I'm glad you enjoyed it though. :) I read your poem, and it was really good. Better than any poem I could write (I'm not great at writing poetry). Xx
  • iWriter

    mumbled "Apologies"

    8 years agoReply
    Much apologies for the amount of time I have missed on here, the strains of life have drifted me off of the movellas track. I shall return and hope you'll all accept me back into the community. Views will of course be provided. ;)
  • iWriter
    8 years agoReply
    It's really good, I love the idea; though you could have developed it further, created more tension in certain areas. There's quite a lot of spelling and punctuation mistakes - nothing a tad of proof reading can't change:). Excellent idea, I love it.
    Christopher Clarence. There's something really strange about that boy. He's wide eyed and pale faced. Every time he grins, death strikes again. Surely a small boy cannot commit such a crime? But who's...
    J.K. Panesar
    8 years ago
    Thank you. I will proof read when I have the time. Thanks
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