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She's a twenty-something writer of stories and mere mortal who saves planets and fights baddies. She's amazingly talented at playing the triangle, I mean the way she just hits all of the right notes – it just gets to you, y'know? If you've read any of her work then she would also like to thank you for giving her work a chance and she would greatly appreciate it if you could leave a comment, rate her work, like, share, fave and become a fan. Happy reading! :)

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  • Nadra Saba
    2 years agoReply
    I love this! You describe every emotion so perfectly and you take the reader on a journey with you. Keep writing, you're very talented! :)
    { CREATIONS }
    { CREATIONS }
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    Letters to those who can relate. { we're all pawns living in this horrendous world of ours }
  • Nadra Saba
    2 years agoReply
    You created an atmosphere of suspense and fear really well, you built it up gradually and slowly which really helps a reader immerse themselves better. I really got to understand the emotions, the highs and lows. I read the first chapter and the only CC I can offer is that there seems to be too much repetition, the word arm is mentioned one too many times.

    You wrote:
    "Dove in a pile leaves" - you missed out "of".
    "Result my death" - "Result in my death."
    "My breaths couldn't calm." - I feel like it would sound better if you changed it something like "My breathing was heavy." Or "I was out of breath, I was fearful it would give me away. Which only made it worse."

    You write very well and I look forward to reading some more of your writing! :)
    Rage
    Rage
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    Terrence "Terror" Averston was a great liar. He lied on a whim, and it always resulted in the best possible way. In a way, lying built who he was. It got him to the top. But one day, his lies caught up...
    Nadra Saba
    2 years ago
    No worries. I enjoyed reading it and it's completely up to you. :)
  • Nadra Saba
    2 years agoReply
    I thoroughly enjoyed reading the first chapter. I love where the story is going. You've included some amazing details and description. You've been wonderfully creative with the names for people and places, I just love the whole concept of it. There's a strong female lead which is always a massive plus for me. There are a few minor things I would like to comment on, if you don't mind. You mention the mother conducting research but you use the word researched instead. You also say "I've went even farther" - which could be changed to "I went even farther". Overall, you're a wonderful writer and I look forward to reading more of this story. Just focus on something else if you're having trouble with this and come back to it, the words and the editing process will flow much more effortlessly. :)
    Our Dark Lies
    Our Dark Lies
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    Olyxe “Ash” Heregale is not to be messed with. She lives for violence, laughs in the face of danger. She’s driven by a rage so bright and fierce, it’s not wonder she does so many stupid things. Freeing...
    Ray Lidstone
    2 years ago
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    Thank you! :) I write on a tablet and the autocorrect can be pretty nasty sometimes, so thank you for pointing that out!
    Nadra Saba
    2 years ago
    No worries! :)
  • Nadra Saba
    2 years agoReply
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    I can relate to this, I've been through the same and sometimes I feel like pain is the only thing I'll always know, even when the rest of the world abandons me. Anyway, this is very well-written. :)
    The unknown agony
    The unknown agony
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    Unknown... This is just a poem. (Part of my newest collection of poetry: The pain of realising it)
    Mørket...
    2 years ago
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    Thank you so much for your comment. I'll always appreciate the feedback :)
    Nadra Saba
    2 years ago
    You're very welcome. I've been feeling down lately and your poem described everything so perfectly. :)
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