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I'm a Movellas Editorial Ambassador, so hit me up with your hidden gems!

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~Shortlisted for Sony Young Movellist of the Year 2013 XD
~Fourth in Young Graphic Artist of the Year
~Winner of Divergent cover competition
~One published short story

Currently reading: 'Agent 6' by Tom Rob Smith

Last read: Stardust
>> A really great read, written in such a way that it's more of an experience than anything i've read in a long time. Weirdly, it has a sense of timelessness to it, the narrative is just so strange and beautiful.
Obviously, the novel has a lot more depth than the film, though i have to say that i preferred the ending to the film. The end of the book was kind of melancholy, but still nice. A wonderful read that i fully recommend. :)

Favourite song atm: Don't have one right now! I have to listen to more music ^_^

  • TheFuzz
    6 years agoReply
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    Does the story have to be finished? It's just that' i've recently had an idea for a novel that fits the bill for it, but it wont be finished by the deadline! Thanks :)
    6 years ago
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  • TheFuzz
    6 years agoReply
    Hey Morgy, i was wondering if you could possibly take down the comment on my review of TFIOS? I'm really sorry, but a troll account's comments may ruin the film for a lot of people, thanks!
  • TheFuzz
    6 years agoReply
    I've been reading this movella on the train and i have to say I'm loving it :) the premise is brilliant and the powers that they have are plain awesome, i especially love the part where the fire morphs into a dragon in Scar's hand!
    This could definitely be improved, though, especially grammar and spelling. Key things to check over:
    -spelling of similar words e.g 'your' and 'you're'
    -using numbers (4) instead of spelling the word (four). Always always spell the word!
    -a sense of time and place>> this sometimes feels a bit off, as sometimes you get characters who are outside one moment and in the dorms the next with no sense of the time having passed between the two scenes. Similarly, the relationships seem to move very fast, but I'm not sur if that's because i didn't notice the passing of days. For example Scar says how she feels that what Miles looks at her with could be love, and later he kisses her, but as far as the reader knows only a day has passed since they met.
    -lastly, just ensure that your narrative flows well, sometimes it changes from a more bias towards Scarlett (which seems the general theme as she is the main character) to being boas towards other characters. Also sometimes it becomes quite informal when the rest of the narrative has not been. This can all make it feel choppy for the reader.
    Hope this has helped! Sorry for any spelling errors im on my phone :P
    Well done and keep writing ^•^ x
    Bellissimi Dragons
    Bellissimi Dragons
    Scar,Serge, Xyla and Ombra Leonardo all find themselves in a fiery situation when they arrive just outside of London at St. Clermont's school. After an Major school accident they flee for the Main City...
  • TheFuzz

    mumbled "Summmeerrrr"

    6 years agoReply
    Yes yes yes i haven't been on in an eternity, but exams are over, woop! I'm going to spend the next month reading whatever the heck i want and going through Hannelore to prepare me for Camp NaNo next month, hoping to use it to kickstart part 2 of Hannelore :D
    I've been pretty awful at actually reading movellas i said i would read for a couple of months, so if i've said i would read something, please link it here because i probably forgot! I'm happy to read anything at the moment :)
    Summer is so close! Just a couple more days till i have to go back to school, then half term then freeeeddoommmmm :D
    Hope you all are having a great time, and hopefully i'll be on more often now!!
    P.S Movellas is sending me to an early screening of TFIOS tomorrow evening! Holy crap on a stick! Lovin life x
    6 years ago
    ParanoiaMy name is Larxene, and I am an orphan. You want to know more? Oh don't pry. Don't say I didn't warn you..

    Could you check this out and give some cc please?
    It'd be appreciated ^.^
    6 years ago
    No problemo :)
    6 years ago
    Hi! I noticed you're an ambassador and I was wondering if you could help me improve on my newest movella by reading it and maybe leaving some CC? Of course if you don't have time, that's completely fine! I just figured I'd ask! :)
    I Won't ForgetI look at him, his blue eyes, his brown hair. Claire has that. He smiles at me, a little smirk, enough to make me want to run back into his arms again....
  • TheFuzz
    7 years agoReply
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    First of all, i must say that i found the whole dream thing really confusing. At first i thought it was real, but then suddenly she was on the roof so i wasn't sure, then i found out it was a dream yet i still do not know when it started!
    Also, before she goes to Dauntless, Tris is still Beatrice :)
    Basically, just neaten it up a bit, make it less confusing ans you'll have a great story :)
    Good luck!
    Being Amity
    Being Amity
    LV Snelson
    7 years ago
    Okay! I'll add in some more bits to make it clear :)
    7 years ago
    Great :)
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